You have lots of good details in your writing and have got lots of the key events of the story. You've made a good start on this and have shared the the beginning and middle of her story but there's a good ending that you've missed. I'd like you to have another look at the task and add a little bit more.
What you have here is a great start Kellan. See you in the comments.
Hey Kellan,
ReplyDeleteYou have lots of good details in your writing and have got lots of the key events of the story. You've made a good start on this and have shared the the beginning and middle of her story but there's a good ending that you've missed. I'd like you to have another look at the task and add a little bit more.
What you have here is a great start Kellan.
See you in the comments.
Daniel :)